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post Dec 10 2004, 01:36 PM
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I have just finished a short study of Group Poetry by British Authors, and, whoo its confusing. So, thinking of my pals here, I thought we all could do a better job. This is how it works:

Read Title: This is the general theme

Read previous lines: This is the current thread of thought.

Add a line: Only one so that it is more fun, and more challenging. The odd poem must rhyme with the even line above it, but the even, line doesn't have to rhyme with the odd one above it: I.e.
"A time in december"

It was snowing,
Dropping little white flakes,
Covering unused rakes,
And little children at play.

End of poem: There isn't one, unless it gets too long, then I will finish it and start a new one.

Okay... Here we GO!

"Winter Woodland"

Not a sound from the trees,


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post Dec 10 2004, 02:39 PM
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cause they were all eating cheese whistling.gif

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post Dec 10 2004, 02:44 PM
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Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping


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post Dec 10 2004, 02:44 PM
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"Winter Woodland"

Not a sound from the trees,
Nor song from hidden waters.

Above version A, sent to limbo when I submitted the same instant as Marth, I guess.

Version B . . .
post Marth:

"Winter Woodland"

Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,

Dueling poems.


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post Dec 10 2004, 02:55 PM
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We have two versions of the poem. So no one feels bad, lets work with two versions and see the road they will make.

Please work double hard and add the line to both versions. thumbsup.gif

QUOTE (d'rbeh @ Dec 10 2004, 02:44 PM)
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping
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QUOTE (DaDungeon @ Dec 10 2004, 02:44 PM)
"Winter Woodland"
........
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
.........

*


1.
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping

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2.
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,


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post Dec 10 2004, 04:37 PM
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QUOTE
1.
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping

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2.
Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
*


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Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking

Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

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post Dec 10 2004, 05:59 PM
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1. Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese
all nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking
Just sneaking more nibbles of cheddars and bries




2. Not a sound from the trees,
cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

In a pageant so splendid


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post Dec 11 2004, 09:47 AM
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1. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese
All nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking
Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries

Winters frosty touch




2. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

In a pageant so splendid
None could be winded


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post Dec 11 2004, 10:18 AM
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Okay, let me understand the way this works, correct me if I'm wrong.

First line of a set can be anything
Second line (even) doesn't have to rhyme with the one above, but can
Third line (odd) has to rhyme with the even one above it
Fourth line (even) doesn't have to rhyme, but can

did I get it right? If so, here goes!


1. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese
All nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking
Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries

Winters frosty touch
Blanketed the forest floor




2. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

In a pageant so splendid
None could be winded
While leaves that have been dead

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post Dec 11 2004, 11:14 AM
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Ette, I think you are right.
If the fourth line can rhyme, with wich line? If there are more lines in the stanza, how do the rules apply?

1. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese
All nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking
Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries

Winters frosty touch
Blanketed the forest floor
Freezing the trees to the core




2. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

In a pageant so splendid
None could be winded
While leaves that have been dead
Were sparkling in the sunlight


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post Dec 11 2004, 11:50 AM
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1. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese
All nestlings were sleeping
And not a mouse was squeaking
Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries

Winters frosty touch
Blanketed the forest floor
Freezing the trees to the core
With the crisp breath we want so much




2. Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.

In a pageant so splendid
None could be winded
While leaves that have been dead
Were sparkling in the sunlight

Lo want do I see




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(any questions should be addressed to the one that started the game.
also changes i thought were done by the starter or with their ok.)
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post Dec 11 2004, 01:23 PM
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Devonette, you are right. The second doesn't have to rhyme with the first, but the third does have to rhyme with the second. The fourth line doesn't have to rhyme with the third, but the fifth line has to rhyme with the fourth, etc. etc. In my own thoughts, and as I have seen group poetry written, the poem was to be just one stream of thought, thus only one stanza, a very long one at that. I guess I should have stated my intentions more clearly. Since we got onto a rocky start, and you all did give some good material, we could start from the last lines and then start using the rhyming rules wink3.gif
Per Gaia's prodding, here is basically what the rules in this post and the first post should mean:

Lines Rhyme
1 a
2 b
3 b
4 c
5 c
6 d
etc. etc.

"Winter Woodland, version 1"

Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
All nestlings were sleeping,
And not a mouse was squeaking,
5 Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries.
Winters frosty touch,
Blanketed the forest floor,
Freezing the trees to the core,
With the crisp breath we want so much.
10 Wolves stalk amongst the trees,

"Winter Woodland, Version 2"

Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.
5 In a pageant so splendid,
None could be winded,
While leaves that have been dead,
Were sparkling in the sunlight.
10 Lo' what do I see,
Crossing over the white sea,

P.S. So that we don't have to count each line, I think it would be best to number ever fifth line, as seen above.


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post Dec 11 2004, 01:30 PM
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Just my opionion, but I think you should just let the poems flow as the come and not worry too much about the stringent rules. The poems were very nicely writing themselves, which is how a lot of the best stuff happens anyway. The two poems were each taking on their own rhyme scheme and becoming very different from one another which was interesting to see.

However, its not my thread so I defer to the threadowner. Just wanted to say that sometimes, ideas have their own rhyme scheme.

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post Dec 11 2004, 01:33 PM
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"Winter Woodland, version 1"

Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
All nestlings were sleeping,
And not a mouse was squeaking,
5 Just sneaking more nibbles of chedders and bries.
Winters frosty touch,
Blanketed the forest floor,
Freezing the trees to the core,
With the crisp breath we want so much.
10 Wolves stalk amongst the trees,
Seeking the lone before it flees.

"Winter Woodland, Version 2"

Not a sound from the trees,
Cause they were all eating cheese.
Filberts marching in threes,
Along with cookies and cream.
5 In a pageant so splendid,
None could be winded,
While leaves that have been dead,
Were sparkling in the sunlight.
10 Lo' what do I see,
Crossing over the white sea,
Coming to carry me forth,


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post Dec 11 2004, 03:52 PM
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there are as many "rhyme schemes" in poetry as there are poems, practically.

we should be happy with "free form" as this will allow the utmost in creativity. if we can think of a line that rhymes with one above it (or ANY above it) we can write it. if we can't we'll just write down a line that comes to mind.

it will be less inhibiting to have free verse than a metred format. do we wish to write a la Marvell in rhyming couplets, or as Shakespeare in his wonderful sonnets? ... and if so, then which form? should we write in iambic pentameter?

let's just write... and have fun reading the wonderful results! smile.gif

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